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  1. jan_aq
    jan_aq January 12, 2005 at 3:37 am |

    “The house-elves took care of Naiya’s and the babies things.” babies’

    “He needed the power he received through the Daramy, but most of all he needed a reason to fight and live for, Severus.” add a comma before Severus.

    “…Not listening to my warning was the last thing Cadmus Snape did. He should have followed his instincts and killed me. He chose instead to obey the Dark Lord, and he too will pay for ordering their deaths. That is why I spy on him and bid my time.” You don’t need the last sentence; readers cna infer that and voicing it just makes it seem over emphasized.

    WOW> When I heard Naiya use the floo to go to the Hogwarts Dunegeons I almost died! Ah, that was so great, I am so happy that Snape will be Harry’s mentor in this one. But when Snape said that she “robbed the cradle”… well she really did- WOW. That was crazy-the age differences. Crazy.

    I hope that Severus demands that Harry and the twins room with him in his quarters at the school.

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