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  1. jan_aq
    jan_aq January 12, 2005 at 2:10 am |

    “Did that mean he was not, and had not been safe there for years? Perhaps he should owl Dumbledore to inform him of that fact.” Hahaha!! i’d love to se ethe look on Dumbly’s face when he gets THAT owl! XD

    “Harry had not stopped to question Dumbledore’s words about the place where he had to spend his summers.” about the place he had to spend his summers (took out the “where”)

    “last time he considered the Dursley’s house ‘home’” Durseys’. If it’s a plural -s and you need to show ownership then have the ‘ after the s. 🙂 I don’t know if that’s a spelling/typo thing or something your-cousin? did while typing some of these up but just so you know- that’s the way you’re supposed to do it. 🙂

    WOW. I love this version of Harry. I was a little iffy with the “IQ to riva Hermione” but the reasoning as to why Harry concealed his intelligence was really well done. I love Harry’s thoughts… part of me feels so sad for him that he plans to do his duty and then find releas and die but I also feel awe and proud that he is deciding to set himself to the task and study- train to defeat Voldemort.

    Wonderful interpretation of Harry’s character. I think that you should add some events of what is going on in the car during all the background information and Harry thoughts; it’s like we just left everything and I think that maybe it would be better if we stayed a bit in the present car ride with the Dursleys. 🙂 Oh- you can do “Dursely’s” to mean plural Dursleys… I think.I usually don’t because then doing ownership of the plural like that would be Dursley’s’ and that looks weird. Ha. XD

  2. jan_aq
    jan_aq January 12, 2005 at 2:11 am |

    Sorry about all the spelling mistakes and typos in that last comment. X|

  3. jan_aq
    jan_aq January 12, 2005 at 2:12 am |

    I can’t find Lubowen 001 – 005 (3) and the link in this entry sends me to a page that says “You are not authorized to view this protected entry.”. I’m just going to skip to number 4.

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